Tighten English prose: strip AI-tell cadences#1
Open
danwahl wants to merge 1 commit into
Open
Conversation
Audit pass across all seven English files removing AI-sounding mannerisms while preserving authorial voice: - Reduce "not X but Y" / "isn't X; it's Y" mechanical contrasts to at most one per section, converting the rest to plain declaratives - Cut the staccato "Not X. Not Y." sentence-fragment device book-wide, including the cross-book "Not humanity in the abstract..." refrain - Trim throat-clearing openers, unearned adverbs, and Tier-1 vocabulary - Update CLAUDE.md key-phrases note so the calibration intent survives without protecting the fragment-stack cadence No facts, figures, citations, or footnotes altered. No em dashes. Co-Authored-By: Claude Opus 4.8 <noreply@anthropic.com> Claude-Session: https://claude.ai/code/session_01PqP5pFoB5Qi9GGs4yNHHzb
This file contains hidden or bidirectional Unicode text that may be interpreted or compiled differently than what appears below. To review, open the file in an editor that reveals hidden Unicode characters.
Learn more about bidirectional Unicode characters
Sign up for free
to join this conversation on GitHub.
Already have an account?
Sign in to comment
1 participant
Add this suggestion to a batch that can be applied as a single commit.This suggestion is invalid because no changes were made to the code.Suggestions cannot be applied while the pull request is closed.Suggestions cannot be applied while viewing a subset of changes.Only one suggestion per line can be applied in a batch.Add this suggestion to a batch that can be applied as a single commit.Applying suggestions on deleted lines is not supported.You must change the existing code in this line in order to create a valid suggestion.Outdated suggestions cannot be applied.This suggestion has been applied or marked resolved.Suggestions cannot be applied from pending reviews.Suggestions cannot be applied on multi-line comments.Suggestions cannot be applied while the pull request is queued to merge.Suggestion cannot be applied right now. Please check back later.
Two-round writing audit across all seven English files, plus a targeted sweep, removing AI-sounding mannerisms while preserving authorial voice.
Changes
not X but Y/isn't X; it's Yto at most one per section; rest converted to plain declaratives.Not X. Not Y.sentence-fragment device book-wide, including the cross-book "Not humanity in the abstract / Not society as a whole / You" refrain (intro, ch5, conclusion) and the intro's "Not definitely. Not can't. Probably shouldn't."CLAUDE.mdkey-phrases list so the title's calibration intent (probably not definitely, shouldn't not can't) survives as guidance without protecting the fragment-stack cadence that prompted the audit.Preserved
Single inline
not because…, but…fragments that read as normal prose; one strongest contrast per section; humor beats, named analogies, the title-emphasis device, and the conclusion's intentional anaphora runs.Guarantees
No facts, figures, citations, or footnotes altered. Zero em dashes. Zero remaining staccato
Not X. Not Y.stacks (verified by grep).🤖 Generated with Claude Code